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UNBALANCE
GOING BACK TO OUR ROUGH CUT FEEDBACK :
On our rough cut feedback we received both positive and negative feedback which was helpful to improving our piece.
Negatives- We had feedback saying that when Kirsty (main character of girl) opens here eyes after the alarm clock goes off and looks directly into the direction of the camera makes the whole film personal and breaks the fourth wall. Therefore we were left in a position where we either had to remove it, replace it with it shot at a different angle or edit it to make it impersonal. We chose to edit it, by this we overlapped it with the same clip however cropped it so it didn't reach the point where she opened her eyes fully to look at the camera. We found this created a nicer effect than what it was previously because it enhanced the delusional effect.
On our first rough cut we were told the quality of our image was bad and grainy due to the low lighting, so we had decided to re-shoot this scene. Below is the shot from the first rough cut.
We got feedback to make our titles on the blank screen shorter because our audience got impatient with it, so we made the duration shorter but also added effects on the words to make it more aesthetic and interesting and we moved more of the titles onto the moving image.
In the first rough cut shown to the audience we had this scene where Kirsty walked by the mysterious man and he tilted his head as she walked past, at this point of the opening we received laughs from the audience. As our genre is a psychological thriller that was the opposite effect we wanted to portray therefore we got rid of this scene.
We did get feedback that did suggest the audience picked up on that the girl returned home after her walk and that she was in her bathroom, but we did take advice to show this by this we could have either re-shot her walking back or added an effect to show the change of time. So we actually added a cross fade to show the time change. We also got feedback that stated our font was too much like it belonged on word and we needed to change it to suit our film more, so we changed our font to a more alternative font that suited the uniqueness and rawness of our film. On the left you can see our original typography in a serif font from our rough cut - and on the right is our updated sans serif font used in our final opening sequence.
POSITIVES : The audience liked the effects we added into the sequence one member said "since last time we saw it i can see that you guys have added effects to the shots, for example when you see the imaginary person you see a glitchy effect on the screen which makes it explains to the audience that the persons not real" - in response to that another audience member agreed and said " i agree it's really lovely".
Another feedback point we got back is that " i really loved the variety of shots and i thought the sound was really good, and how it comes into shot (alarm clock).
The audience also said it was very good and that the waking up part was a lot better than the one in the rough cut 1 which was the bad thing initially about the first rough cut edit and the effect gave the right effect. Above this an audience member agreed and stated it really emphasaised that disturbed mental state. Beside is a screenshot mid frame of a shot from the asleep scene.
We got positive feedback on the camera shots saying they are " so cinematic" and "filmic" and " i love the movement of the camera, some of the tilt shots and over the shoulder shots are absolutely gorgeous".
Above this they really pointed out the great different shots e.g the camera on floor, extreme close ups and long shots etc.